Should FixStyleFound in 5-15% of dissertations

Wordy Phrases: Every Extra Word Weakens Your Argument

Found in 5-15% of dissertation sentences. "Due to the fact that" instead of "because." "In order to" instead of "to." Your committee reads these as filler, not scholarship.

FIX

Replace this wordy phrase with a more concise alternative.

What This Issue Is

Wordy phrases are multi-word expressions that can be replaced with one or two words without losing meaning. "Due to the fact that" means "because." "In order to" means "to." "At the present time" means "now." "It is important to note that" means nothing — just delete it and state the important thing directly. These phrases add word count but subtract clarity.

Doctoral students often use wordy phrases because longer sentences feel more academic. They don't. The APA Publication Manual explicitly calls for "clear and concise" writing and warns against using three words where one will do. Your committee has read thousands of dissertations, and they can spot padding instantly. Wordy writing doesn't signal depth — it signals that you're either unsure of your point or trying to inflate your page count.

The good news is that wordy phrases are the easiest issue in your dissertation to fix. They're mechanical substitutions: search, find, replace. You don't need to restructure your argument or rethink your analysis. You just need to trade in the bloated phrase for the lean one. A single editing pass focused on wordiness can cut 5-10% of your word count while making every remaining sentence sharper.

Why Your Committee Flags It

Concise writing improves readability and demonstrates command of academic prose.

Before & After Examples

Before

Due to the fact that the sample was small, results should be interpreted with caution.

After

Because the sample was small, results should be interpreted with caution.

"Due to the fact that" → "Because." "Was unable to" → "could not." "In a timely manner" → "on time." Three substitutions, half the words.

Before

Due to the fact that the participants were not available, the researcher was unable to conduct the interviews in a timely manner.

After

Because the participants were unavailable, the researcher could not conduct the interviews on time.

"In order to" → deleted. "Gain a better understanding" → "Understanding." "It is necessary to" → "requires."

Before

In order to gain a better understanding of the phenomenon, it is necessary to examine the existing literature.

After

Understanding this phenomenon requires examining the existing literature.

"The purpose of this study is to" → "This study." "The ways in which" → "how." "Make use of" → "use." "In the context of" → "in."

Before

The purpose of this study is to explore the ways in which teachers make use of technology in the context of their daily classroom activities.

After

This study explores how teachers use technology in daily classroom activities.

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Frequently Asked Questions

No. Concise writing makes your dissertation seem confident. Compare: "It is important to note that the findings of this study suggest that there may be a relationship between X and Y" versus "The findings suggest a relationship between X and Y." The second version is shorter, clearer, and more authoritative. Your committee will appreciate that you respect their time.
If your dissertation is only long enough because of filler phrases, you have a content problem, not a wordiness problem. Cutting wordy phrases might remove 5-10% of your word count, but that space should be filled with substantive content: deeper analysis, additional evidence, or more thorough discussion. Your committee would rather read 180 lean pages than 200 padded ones.
The top offenders we see are: "due to the fact that" (because), "in order to" (to), "it is important to note that" (delete), "a large number of" (many), "make use of" (use), "on the basis of" (based on), "with regard to" (regarding/about), "in the context of" (in), "the purpose of this study is to" (this study), and "has the ability to" (can).
Yes. The APA Publication Manual (7th edition) devotes an entire section to conciseness, stating: "Say only what needs to be said" (Section 4.6). It specifically warns against "wordiness," "redundancy," and "evasiveness." If your institution uses APA style, writing concisely isn't just good practice — it's a formatting requirement.

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