Should FixClarityFound in 10-15% of dissertations

Vague Language: The Invisible Problem That Undermines Every Argument You Make

Found in 10-15% of dissertation paragraphs. Words like "some," "various," and "significant" feel precise to you but tell your committee absolutely nothing.

FIX

Replace the vague phrase with specific, measurable language.

What This Issue Is

Vague language is any word or phrase that could mean different things to different readers. "Several studies" — how many? Three? Thirty? "A significant impact" — statistically significant, or just noteworthy? "Various factors" — which ones? Your committee reads these phrases and immediately writes "be specific" in the margin because vague language makes your argument unfalsifiable. If you never commit to a specific claim, nobody can evaluate whether your evidence actually supports it.

This is a conceptual trap, not just a word-choice problem. Most doctoral students use vague language because they're hedging — they're not confident enough in their knowledge to commit to specifics, so they retreat into generalities. "Many researchers have found" feels safer than "Twelve studies published between 2018 and 2023 found" because you don't have to defend the number. But your committee sees right through it. They know the vagueness means you either haven't done the reading or you're afraid to stake a claim.

The fix requires discipline, not talent. Every time you write a word like “some,” “many,” “various,” “significant,” “important,” or “a number of,” stop and ask: can I replace this with a specific number, name, or measurable outcome? If you can, do it. If you genuinely can’t, that’s a signal you need to go back to your sources and find the specific data.

Why Your Committee Flags It

Words like "meaningful," "various," and "significant" sound academic but say nothing concrete. Committees demand precision—they want to know exactly what you studied, found, and concluded, not vague generalities.

Why Students Get This Wrong

Academic writing values precision. Words like "meaningful" or "significant" feel scholarly but actually mean nothing without definition.

Think of it this way

Every time you write "meaningful" or "significant," ask: "By what measure? According to whom? How would I prove this?"

Before & After Examples

Before

The program had meaningful impact on attitudes.

After

The program improved attitudes, with confidence scores increasing 23% (p < .01).

"Various," "significant," and "learning outcomes" are all vague. Replace each with a specific, verifiable quantity.

Before

Various researchers have found that technology has a significant impact on learning outcomes.

After

Seven studies published between 2019 and 2023 found that one-to-one laptop programs increased standardized test scores by 8-15% (Smith et al., 2021; Jones, 2022).

"A long time" and "many students" tell the reader nothing. Specific timeframes and numbers build credibility.

Before

The problem has existed for a long time and affects many students.

After

Achievement gaps between low-income and higher-income students have persisted for over three decades (Reardon, 2011) and currently affect approximately 11 million Title I-eligible students nationwide (NCES, 2022).

"Some," "suggest," and "somewhat effective" triple-hedge the claim into meaninglessness.

Before

Some studies suggest that professional development can be somewhat effective.

After

A meta-analysis of 35 studies found that sustained professional development (50+ hours) improved teacher instructional practices, with an average effect size of 0.54 (Desimone & Garet, 2015).

Self-Check Checklist

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Frequently Asked Questions

Apply the "stranger test." If someone outside your field reads the sentence, would they know exactly what you mean? "Several studies found positive results" fails this test — how many studies? What kind of results? How positive? If a sentence requires the reader to guess at your meaning, it's too vague.
No. Academic hedging (“the results suggest,” “this may indicate”) is appropriate when you're discussing tentative findings or generalizing beyond your data. The problem is using vague quantities ("many," "some") and vague descriptors ("significant," "important") when specific data exists. Hedge your interpretations, not your facts.
Caution is about certainty: "These findings suggest X" is cautious. Vagueness is about specificity: "Various findings indicate some impact" is vague. You can be both cautious and specific: "These five studies suggest a moderate positive effect (d = 0.3–0.5) on reading comprehension." Your committee wants precision in your claims, not necessarily certainty.
Many standardized rubrics flag vague language as a quality indicator. "Precise language" means replacing general terms with specific, measurable ones. Instead of "students performed better," write "students scored 12 points higher on the post-test (M = 84.2, SD = 6.1)." The rubric is checking whether you can translate research findings into concrete terms.

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